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Fulcrum prison city isn't on any map, an abandoned city, converted to house some of the most unmanageable inmates, formerly part of the penal system. Markes, one of the residents, is mean, greedy, treacherous, shameless but most of all calculating. He is tapped, by the administration running Fulcrum, to act as an inside man working to retrieve a "package”: retrieve it from Diego, the leader of the biggest gang in town.
He accepts the proposition knowing the gravity, literally, that would be the price of refusing. Despite being furnished with the help of the robotic prison guards, maneuvering to accomplish his goal, while convincing his own crew that he is not a rat, will be a large task. Being who he is, Markes has a plan, one that will leave a pile of destruction and bodies in its wake. And if he can work it just right, he will be standing on top of that pile when things are said and done.
Woo! Welcome back Alex! It's a tough month to be in though. I like the set up to this comic a lot. Not as much as I liked Sides on a whole, mind you, but the set up is really really good. The robot design makes this feel like a prequel to Supertron. Like, shortly after this story the guards gain sentience and take over the earth. Look forward to your next one!
With all the good stuff goin on, I forgot to mention your great job on the art. I'm doing that now.
Great style-line and colors.
I think that it is really important on a comics, but this must walk together with screemplay.
I found these things on your comics.
Nice
Alexander get your fight on hommie! Good luck!
The prison system in shades of grey, an interesting allegory.
The style of the art for this comic is excellent. I think it suits the story to a ‘t.’ If I have one issue with the art, however, it’s in the ‘camera’ angles used: there was not enough dynamism. I think the comic would have had a lot more punch had perspective been manipulated more.
The choice of story allows plenty of latitude for the creator and, if well executed, will take the reader through an entertaining romp.
My view on the writing is that there was too much bloat. It seemed that there were 24 pages of comic jammed into this eight-page format, and that leads to pacing issues. Less information presented would have left the reader with more intrigue; and there could have been a little more economy of words as well. While the dialogue was interesting enough, there should be more differentiation between the different speaker’s tones.
Overall, an interesting read with potential.
Hmmm, somehow your comic's always are my faves, but they don't seem to click with everyone. I'd say another interesting comic, Sides was still my favorite, but probably just because I don't always like the bad guys. And you sure did make him look and feel the part of that. Good Luck, hopefully one of these days, you'll get a comic that appeals to a majority. P.S. Maybe you just need the marketing side of things to be a bit better to attract voters?
Loved the overlapping bubbles for interruptions. The flow of the dialogue was necessary to lead the eye to the right panel in a few places, and there was a LOT going on in this one. The one and only critique-y thing I have to say is that I didn't feel drawn to the MC at all...but then, I'm not really sure whether we're meant to...would be interesting to see where this goes. Good luck!
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Blaq- Thanks I am glad ya like it :)
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Gnar- Well you definitely picked up on the feel I was going for :) Glad it hit the spot for you :)
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Jorge- Awesome I am always glad to have another fav :)
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Alien- Well I would love to be in the top three (preferably number 1 :) ) And hearing that it is something you would continue to read is a hell of a compliment :)
I love the color design and line art, very distinctive
BloodThirstyLoveHateViolence rightoffthebat, & right til the end. Lotsa Panels, Lotsa Work. Like your monocadetgreybluecolor, and your overlapping interruptions. Great writing... not overedited & dumbed down as some of us succumb to, great job, A Lot to Like Here.
Ditto to the samurai. Fulcrum's got a fave from me.
Not sure how this one is not in the top 3, great pacing, great characters designs(love the design of Markes). Maybe it gets alittle muddy with the colors, not sure, but this is one i would read.
Bob- Thanks! I am glad ya liked the story I am glad to have your vote along for the ride :)
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Rune- Thanks, It seems to be a concern for a few people so it is definitely something I will push harder in the future :)
Zah- Awesome man I look forward to seeing it :)
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Eps- Thanks for taking the time to check it out and for the comment. I was trying to push myself to work with more interesting panel layout then the usual horizontal thing. It seems to have been a bit hit and miss having had comments that land on both sides of the fence. As for the overlapping bubbles I am sorry that it doesn't appeal to you visually but I personally like it better when representing some one speaking over some one else. For something loud that would surprise the original speaker I agree that the double line method works better but in this case it was less abrupt so the layering seemed the way to (in my head at least). Again thanks for taking the time to leave a more in depth comment :)
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Boon- Thanks :)
consistent style and solid story throughout.You get my vote in a very competitive month!
Love the style! The b+w pallet and layout made it a bit hard to follow, still great stuff!
Dude nice work. I see you have been playing with your style quite a bit. I'm going to try and get my first comic up here next month myself, you have inspired me.
Howdy, congrats on making this months comp. Nice entry, good story setup and nice art. Good script and dialogue. I didn't mind the lack of colors and thought the tones suited the story. I wasn't to crazy about the panel layout and word balloons. The panel layout of some screens felt like it could of gone in several directions with only the speech bubbles guiding you to the next pannel rather than the layout quiding you. I also found the layered sppech bubbles a bit annoying. I got the sense that it was to show interrupting speech but i think there are better more traditional ways of showing this, by using the double dash at where the interruption occurs. Nice style of art and cool character designs. All the best in the comp!!
Nice work.
Erin- Thanks! I need all of it I can get :)
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C175- Glad to have you along :) Thanks
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splat- Thanks man! I really appreciate the vote rating and fav :D
Good luck Alex! xoxo :)
sent by newbot. good luck!
Great Job, bud! Looks awesome 5 stars, fav and my vote. Good luck!!!
Thanks Lune. I wanted to keep it in a subtle mono tone to emulate the cold grey prison, while not really being in a traditional prison. But it does seem to be a sticking point for a few people so I will have to make some changes to ratchet up the punch in the future. As always I feel privileged to have that support :)
I dig it a lot and I can tell you're working hard, but .. I wish you'd have used some awesome colors! It just doesnt pop out as much and loses a lot of depth. I dunno, maybe its the blue tones. Good luck, Hun! We are rooting for you!
Blue- Ha ha ha well I am glad it doesn't seem to be familiar in the bad way. I am glad ya liked the story telling (it is pronounced Markes, like I got 20 out of 40 marks on that test :) ) I would have loved to have more about what exactly Markes is planning but it seemed pretty dense as it was... now if you vote for me then everyone gets what they want :D
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Apoka- Thanks I really appreciate the vote :)
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Cin- Thanks, appreciations in a big big way.
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Brian- Thanks man, I really enjoyed trying to go a bit more vertical on the panel layouts on this one. Glad ya liked it :)
Cal- You know there is something about the way you comment that I just really like :) A tertiary colour is definitely something I am going to have to look into to help with my push and pull in the panel.
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Alley- I tried to keep anything that was a bit smaller as unimportant dialogue so it wouldn't effect the overall play-out of the story, but I am going to have to do something about that in the future because it seems to cause a bit of a bump in the in the pacing if people are struggling to figure those bubbles out. Thanks for the comment.
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Zero- Haha well if I get enough votes you will get to see how wild she is :) (it is pretty friggin wild :) )
China-Thanks I am glad ya liked it and that it caught your eye right off the bat... well I am pretty happy about that :)
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ryan-Well I am absolutely jazzed to hear that they are getting better and it is good to have had ya along for the zuda comics ride :)
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James- Thanks Clay, I am glad ya liked it :)
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Quin- Danke!
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Kid- Hey I will lose in any month I choose to! hahaha good luck to us both maybe we will be able to span a quantum rift and tie this month, settling it all with an epic thumb war :)
Stroker- He is indeed back, I just can't stop getting back on the horse no matter how many times it chucks me off :)
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BT- Yeah it seems that the colours on this one so far are not conveying the depth/ focal point they need to. Which will have to be addressed moving forwards on this or another comic. Thanks for the comment.
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Pow- Thanks man, I am glad to hear that weather the past comics have had any traction with you this one seems to have a little bit of grip. I hope I do have a shot, it would be nice to win one :)
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Rod- Thanks!
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Arb-Thanks, I am glad ya liked the jux of the smooth images with the subject matter. It was one of the things I was trying to achieve so hearing that you got it makes me really happy :)
Sen- Thanks I am honored to have your vote and I am really glad you liked the comic. You know I am the same way about the 8th page I love comics on zuda where I click for the next page 2 or 3 times before I realize I am on the 8th. That feeling of wanting more has really swayed my votes a bunch in a bunch of comps.
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Slide- Ha ha ha ya picked up on the different colours eh? Well I hope we get to see what it means ;)
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Jc- Thanks, I was happy with the amount I got into each page and wasn't sure if I had crossed the line and was going to get panned for being too dense (heh) And so far it seems I haven't so I am stoked to hear that :D
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Quas- Thanks I can use all the luck I can get my hands on :)
Thought this art looked familiar, Stplmstr. ;) Enjoyed the back-and-forth banter between Markes and other characters. (Is it pronounced "Marcus"?) Thought it could've given a little more as to where it is headed, but fun storytelling, none the less.
it's a nice comic!!! I liked it and voted too!!
all voted up!
Good stuff man, ambitious panel layout. Stuffed a lot in there. Looking good.
As opposed to PowFlip, I'm always excited to see a comic of yours on here! Your style looks fantastic on the screen, although I would also like maybe one additional color. I think Sides is still my favorite out of all your work, but this has great potential. C'mon people, get the votes out for this incredibly consistent and talented artist!
Good dialogue in here.
Nice pacing, even though you have crazy amounts of panels in some of the pages. It seems to still read well. Some balloons I couldn't make out towards the end.
I thought it was great.
I love this story. I really got into it and i want my own robot guard. Also he has a wild chick. haha
very nice Alexander... the first comic I chose to look at... sharp and very different looking people, I really like the look and feel of the images... good luck.
I've loved all yer comics thus far, and this one topped 'em all!
Really nice colours and distinctive look on this one. Good luck this month!
Excellent comic you got here!
You had to be in this month, didn't you, Stplmstr!?!?!
Damn you. :P
aaaaaaand he's back! with another sweeet comic too. I really like the main character's facial expressions...good luck!
I like the way your clever placement of word balloons helps lead my eye down the unconventional panel layouts, steering me in the right direction.
The art is sharp as a tack, but there's alot going on in each page. I might have preferred the addition of at least one more color in the palette to highlight or emphasize key moments. You're almost there with the colored words, and the green of the hologram.
Barring that, perhaps a greater variety of line weight might have helped punch up the visuals.
You know Stpl, I'm usually pretty skeptical when I see a comic of yours up here. But I think of what you have submitted this one is my fave. Disregarding the nonsensical layout of the first page and ho-hum coloring, it was actually decently entertaining and not a struggle to get through. I haven't read all the competition yet (but it's looking pretty weak so far), but I think you got a shot with this one.
Good comics!
The art is good and suits the digital medium perfectly; I think you really played to the format! Interesting story and you really jam packed the pages with dialogue, in a good way. I couldn't believe I was still on page 4 when I was there.
Your comic is a kick in the head because the art looks friendly and yet the subject matter is pretty rugged. Great job!
hi. just wanted to say that you have my vote this month, fulcrum is easily the best entry. the most readable, the most consistent art - all very solid. the real clincher for me personally was that I was left feeling a little sad when i got to page 8 and there was no more left to read- which can be a rarity for me on this site (even when i kind of like the entry) good luck
another great one. Interesting with the different vials. I love the main character's nose. Good Luck!