Celadore
Celadore is © Caanan Grall
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Celadore has failed. Christian, an evil corporate vampire has lit the day candle, which allows vampires to walk in the sun. Celadore must set out to destroy the candle, only her soul has been bounced into the comatose body of Evelyn Massey, an 11yr old girl. Plagued by the ghost of the actual Evelyn, Celadore is eventually joined by Sam, the over-eager next door neighbor, and her old posse: Jams, the only Frankenstein ever born of two others; Wax, Celadore's ex-boyfriend; And Ness, Celadore's business partner, tooth fairy, & qualified masseuse. Adventure, hilarity, and surprises ensue in a world where even magic isn't safe from capitalism.
That was me, but I was kidding.
'Ya got a problem with Mantra????
Someone had to mention Mantra. (Rollseyes)Anyway - enjoyed the look and i liked the ideas here. Look forward to more! Good luck!
Kidglove,
You said what I meant to say in my poorly written little bit :) Critiques are good (if they're good)!
Very gripping intro! Definitly got me hooked and I want to read more.
It's not quite perfect, but I want to see more.
i really liked this one. the artwork is good and i like where it's going story wise. i read the synopsis afterwards and the whole tooth fairy thing caught me by surprise(not necessarily in a bad way). i can understand why this is first. as far as the whole originality comments, calling anything unoriginal nowadays is so damn pointless, even saying something is unoriginal is in itself, unoriginal.
Kidgloves has a point.
BlueMaxx,
You didn't actually critique the comic. You simply stated what comics you like better this month. So, you were more like a commercial for Robodeath(cuz you're right Zombies and transforming robots has never been done) and Action, Ohio(cuz crime noir/pulp and superheroes have never been done either *cough* powers *cough*). See how easy it is to reduce something to the lowest common denominator and compare it to other works?
critique=an article or essay criticizing a literary or other work; detailed evaluation; review
See that part in the definition where it says "detailed"? Simply saying you don't like something isn't a critique. That's an opinion, which you admit to expressing. But please, watch how you throw the word "critique" around.
Wow, Fyreflie1980 must really like this comic but, obviously, really doesn't like opinions. How dare I write a critique on something that is to be voted for!! It's completely illogical of me! I apologize! hahaha!
Anybody ever told you this comic reminds them of Buffy???
How about Mantra a old comic from the ultraverse back in the 90's???
kidding kidding;)
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Anyway the bad stuff first, your vampires are not scary -at all. I know your not going with hardcore horror on this one but still yet, they are supposed to be vamps who are going to try to take over the world they need to look the part. The really pale one looks like a mime. Not a scary mime either more like a ***** french one wearing cheap grease paint. Seriously The Count from Sesame Street looks more menacing then these VAMPYRE'S and he is only maybe a foot and a half tall with a guys hand stuck up his arse!!!!!!
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That aside I think the story is well written very good pace, and fairly easy to read font. the colors for the screens with Eve/Cela waking up and being taken away were good, but the death/night scenes/screens didn't invoke the mood of oh no mankind's last best hope has finally been killed (or at least vampire lord christian thinks she has).
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You just had to name him Christian didn't you, at least it wasn't Angel or Lestat(sp?);)
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I thought Eve/Cela in hospital were the best done/ best screens of your comic, end on a high note art/story wise and a damn good cliffhanger. Your art really did a amazing job on these screens -pitiful looking vampires be damned. You really did well on their expressions showing the emotions the characters were feeling, not something you always see in a comic.
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I always read the synopsis first, so a well written 1 of those always scores you points/stars with me. Very fine synopsis you have here C.
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Nice set-up for the future of the story Eve wants her body back, but not before Cela tries to us it to stop the vampires along with her scooby gang (sorry about that) sidekicks. With Eve as a friendly ghost/helper to Cela I'm sure.
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If you win I bet the next screens are a heart-to-heart between Eve and Cela about what is really going on here very nice.
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I wasn't surprised by the twist death because i read the synopsis first, but still very nice way to get people to pay attention.
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You get a fav, and about 4 stars from me, so enjoy!!!!
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Still don't know who I'm going to vote for yet......
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If you win make a needed change (like P for D, and Road did) and draw more scary vamps!!!!
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You past the click 9 test. Meaning I was clicking for that 9 screen before I remembered it wasn't there yet. Always a good sign for a Zuda comic.
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All in all, I liked it.
Canaan,
as evidenced by your 24-hour comics and other work, your ability to handle sequential events is great. Characters are consistent in appearance, layout flows well; overall very good looking. For me though, pages 4-8 were the strongest in your submission (although, like a few people upon first read I didn't get what was up with Evelyn's spectre). The first three pages are well told, but some of the art felt 'off.' I can't come up with the words I want to explain myself. If it comes to me I'll make an addendum.
However, I like Celadore a lot. The read was spirited (no pun intended) and the set-up for the story works. From this submission I have great faith in what you can deliver.
What's it like being in first? :)
--Gabe
BlueMaxx: People who don't want to cause offense generally don't preface a statement with "no offense," then talk about un-originality. Personally, I believe that your writing skill would be put to better use writing something constructive about the entries you DO like, on THEIR message boards.
Or...you could jinx this "uncool" comic by voting for it and put your own theory to the test.....
Great story & very professional artwork. 5 out of 5 stars from me. The art alone makes me wanna vote for this comic but I'm still deciding. Good Luck.
No offense to the fans...but it was okay...and that's it. I'm sure girls will enjoy it a little more for the fact of the main characters alone. To me though, it was an indirect Buffy rip...easily. I know, I know, eight pages is all they get but it just wasn't enough to get my interest. Number 1! Man O'Jeez...what about Robodeath and, hell, Action, Ohio! Two really great ones this month and everyone's voting for this...no offense but those two are jampacked with originality! Sigh...oh well, I always seem to jinx the cool ones by voting for them...hm.
Good stuff, Caanan. There's definitely a lot of freshness here to offset any similarities to other material.
Now, you owe The Kid two. He got me to vote for you, too.
This might be a little late, but I've been out of town. Congrats, Canaan, on taking the top spot!
great artwork and story. It must be difficult to cram origin, action and some humour in only eight pages. Well done. I liked it best from the beginning. The only critique would be the use of Jim Gordon as the dad, haha.
Hey bryy, cheddar - thanks! I just hope I can keep the momentum up.
Badger - there is indeed, a lot of work and pain - and sleepless nights - that go into comics. You gotta love it to do it! Thanks for the comments. :oD
Inventivehero - I'm glad those ads seem to be working. For the ad I didn't want anything kinda generic, instead I really wanted something that hints at the greater world behind the story - I'm working on a couple more to get out there too... As well as a few other bits and pieces I'll be posting soon.
and Bear, thanks heaps! - (and kid, I owe you one. ;o)
Kidgloves told me to check out your comic. Glad he did. You have my vote.
I had voted for Capitan Luck, but originally it had been close. I changed my vote because of the ad you're running on starslip.com which hints at a really cool story with deeper characters. I want to see how both Frankenstein's Monster and the Tooth Fairy have to play into this quirky occult comic! Savvy advertising!
I have been doing cartoons for many years, not strip, I think your work is excellent. I know how much time and effort plus inspiration goes into even a simple cartoon, Well done.
I wish you the greatest success.
Every story has a parallel. It's not the story that makes it good but in the telling!
Congrats on going up to top position!
100 favorites in two weeks. Congrats.
Fantastical congratulations! You deserve it! Keep plugging!
Hey Ron, Steve, Kid, orijone, Iho, tomstan, Dustin, Jules - thanks!
Sam - thanks for the plug on your blog! :o)
(And Bryy if you're still watching, thanks too!)
Johnnyray - I'm sure that is the exactly the kind of comment Zuda likes to hear. I know I do.
And Neil - put up your dukes sir! ;oP
Thanks to EVERYONE for getting me to the top, you're all the awesomest! ... but it's only been one week, so newcomers? - keep on voting! :oD
NUMBER ONE CAANAN!!!!
Wooooo!
I'm prayin' it holds for ya man.
Really enjoyed the read. Nice work!
Go Caanan!
cool concept and well done. good job.
Hey man I'm new here and I gotta say this comic of yours is pretty damn good. In fact I just signed up a few minutes ago just to give you a vote. It's that good. I hope to see more of your comic, 'cuz at first I was skeptical (vampire-ish stuff isn't usually my thing), but it's got some great humor and dialog in there and the art's also really good. I also had a lot of fun acting out the characters in my head (if you ever get this thing picked up for animation, maybe I could be a voice actor? Haha just jokin' on that one. I'd probably only be good for one of the vamps or the little girl's dad). In short, great read and keep it up. You deserve it.
Congratulations!You must believe it,this is your place.I wish you keep 1st rank till the end.
Good stuff.
Congrats, man! I'm not upset because your comic is great and if I have to lose the top spot to someone, I'm glad it's you... but here I come...
Congrats, Caanan!!!!!
told you you'd get over that hump!
Congratulations on taking the lead, Caanan!
Have to agree with Pen on the Buffy take of things here-- leading with a vampire chase mixing some humor and action makes that inevitable I think. But it really gets my interest at the hospital scene, where the and the expressions and action is paced to really grab you. Although after the ghost/spirit arrives it was difficult to tell who was who-- it a bit confusing to tell entirely what was going on by the end of it...
You can do eeet! 'eh? =D
Being an art student, I must say, I love the graphics... I want to see more too. Keep up the good work!
Interesting idea, I'm really intrigued and can't wait to read more.
I usally don't like stories about vampires, but i like your job.You already have my vote.
cool stuff....when's the next chapter coming out?...
I really enjoyed that :) I want to know more!
Kittles, frequentcontributor, raven, edna - thanks muchly for the comments!
Bryy thanks for the vote! I don't envy you guys out there this month, so much good stuff to choose from, but if your vote rests with me, I will most certainly take it! :o)
So, RKB, come back here when you finally vote for me, and let me know. Appreciate it. Ha ha! ;oD
I think if I was out of the running this month, my vote would have gone to Captain Luck or Colonel McTaggert. Usually I have my own clear winner after the first read through, so it's heartening to know I would have been torn for once. Zuda just keeps getting better.
I don't tell people who I am going to vote for finally until after I get done switching my vote around a few times.
You won my vote back from Hannibal.
Oh my gods frequent contributer actually likes something. Way to go guys (he hates almost everything).
I liked it. I'm worried about that little girl. I got hooked. Good job.
Interesting, nice art and story, and not really much like Buffy at all... yet. I could stand to read more.
This is the first comic I read this month, and I'm still not sure if I'll vote for it. The art is fairly good, also the colors, thought sometimes it looks a little rushed.
About the story: I've never been a fan of vampires stuff, but I've seen a lot of it. The main problem whit vampire stories is that is a theme too exploited, and when somebody try to give it a new angle, something different, he or she ends most of the time basically reinventing the entire mythos around it.
This can be really hard to pull it out right, as people is tired of the same old cliché but resistant to rationalize the vampire thing through new explanations (even more if it has to be interpreted using XXI century science). I'm not saying it can be done, it's just really, really hard.
I like the vampire-hunter-in-child-body thing, and I think this may be the strongest point of the story. Anyway, good luck.