World of Chi: Chronicles
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"World of Chi: Chronicles" tells the tale of the inhabitants of Chi and their struggles to find the truth of their existence. Their conflicting beliefs in multiple gods and ideologies for the creation of Chi have made war a constant threat as each side asserts its position and deters the other from doing something cataclysmic.
"Chronicles" is told through the eyes of two teenagers: Kahbi and Kitai. Kahbi was a princess and future leader of her people when invaders attacked and began collecting her people as slaves. Now in a strange land, she is rescued from enslavement by Kitai's family. Together they learn everything they believe could be wrong and when their realms collide it threatens to bring the world to its end .
I'm so excited for more!!! I can tell that I will love it. I agree though about the amount of narration, it being a bit much and all. But other than that, it's amazing, both the art and the story.
wow, fantastic art!
beutiful stuff !
one of the great arts here on zuda!
Beautiful art. May I suggest be careful with some of your word balloon placement and text continuity, but this is a masterpiece in the making. Love to see great storytelling fully capitalise on your art if you know what I mean.
Nice art and graphics,just a little bit confuse in some caption on page 1. About the story,i think eight pages are not enough for give a well-balanced judgement.
Well,i would like to read more! Good work and good luck!
Our recent interview with www.ActionFlickChick.com is now up on their site. Please take a minute to check it out. For those readers wondering where the "Amber Hale, Supermodel" story is headed, you might find the first and last questions especially informative.
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If you missed AFC's exclusive preview of our upcoming "Reign" comic, there's a link to that as well.
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Thanks again to everyone for their support!
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We want to thank all of you for your continued support for our projects and hope you'll continue on the journey with us in BHE's bright future!
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Sincerely, Daren Strange & Lewis Walker
Thanks very much for your comments and enthusiasm, TheNormalOne and BloodySeph! Really appreciate it! Unfortunately, we're not pursuing World of Chi at this time. However, if you like the art style, we're currently working with Kirsi again on our upcoming project "Black Halo: Reign." It's a completely different story with an entirely different set of characters, but the art style is in the same vein. We've got that and "Black Halo: Amber Steel, Supermodel" (illustrated by Josh Howard of Viper Comics' "Dead@17" fame) coming soon! Make sure to check it out! Thanks again! -Daren Strange
wow the art is amazing... and i hope the story is going some place good... good so far... deffinantly good.
Great art. I like the way the stort is going. looking forward to more.
Thanks to everyone who voted and/or checked us out! This has been a great experience and, although this particular comic is on indefinite hold, we've got a LOT of new things in store in the coming months. We're looking forward to bringing it to you! Again, our sincerest thanks!
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Black Halo Entertainment
www.blackhaloentertainment.com
I love the art work and I'm looking forward to what happens next. I think you did a fine job with only 8 pages! Can't wait for the next 8!
Now THIS comic is pretty! Far better artwork than the other painted submissions this month on Zuda... but still plagued by the same inconsistancy and composition problems. The panels are all over the place, making it hard to take the comic seriously as a well thought out piece of ART. Perhaps if more emphasis were placed on telling the story with the art instead of cluttering the pages with text boxes, I would have less need to complain... though even professional painted comics seem to suffer from these problems. But like I said, the artwork is damn pretty in most places (although in some it feels rushed or poorly designed), and the character designs are phenomenal; like you (the artist) should be working for game companies doing design work and making a six-figure salary.
very cool artwork, was difficult to read certain pages but i wish you good luck. keep up the good work
It is extremely pretty! But I noticed a typo - describing the demon's eyes as "pitch" black you spelled pitch "picth".. and there are some other small titchy uses of the english language here and there... "She lay over his shoulders" instead of "laid" and whatnot.
Thank you DShide - greatly appreciated!!!
Very good. Leaves me a bit unclear as to what is going on but hey you only had 8 pages. I'd like to see more. 4/5 stars and a fav.
C. Edward Sellner – Thank you. I appreciate your enjoyment of and enthusiasm for WoC. Unfortunately, we’ve decided not to continue this story right away if it doesn’t have a pretty remarkable and dramatic turnaround in the voting. The artwork is paid and it’s not cheap (although Kirsi does a wonderful job keeping it as low as possible). We have other stories we’d like to offer the Zuda community before getting back to this one. There will be some interesting developments coming up for the World of Chi universe on our website though (www.BlackHaloEntertainment.com). Just not a full comic offering like we wanted until much later down the road.
Pretty awesome! Definitely one of the reasons this month's competition is very hard. The art is beautiful. Its haunting, dramatic, exotic yet very real all at the right places. The story also has a lot of potential to be an epic scale saga. Hope whatever happens this continues.
All you new contestants look alike to me.
I was kinda wondering about that, Bryy, haha. But no worries! =)
Just realized I called you furman.
d'oh.
Ha! I bet more people read it than you think, but I'll take your word for it. Hehe
Trilogy? Schmilogy! Ah, don't worry. No one reads my blog anyway!
mpd57: Thanks for the review! Really glad you like the strip. (Although you were a little harsh when you said you wouldn't want to tell your friends about it, HAHA! But it's all good!) One thing I did want to address though: Chi is not a trilogy. There are 3 parallel series planned featuring different chars in the same world. I'm not sure if you want to correct that or not - completely up to you, but I wanted to make sure you were aware. Again, thanks for the favourable review. Very cool!
The last review of the month is available over at:
http://www.mpd57.blogspot.com
It's the last one so it must be the Finnish (Geddit?) Sometimes I make myself laugh!
Nice art. Too much telling with description boxes in the beginning, but towards the end the pacing and panel storytelling is better. Good luck this month.
Very cool graphics. Give us the preview of what happen to her next.... BTW, does this store on Netapps filer too:-)
You have won my vote from the 4th floor. What happens to her next? I hope you win so that I can find out and explore more of her world and powers. Your images are very dramatic and well thought out.
Heya Bobby. Yeah I know it's trademark, not copyright, hehe. I just didn't want to get into over a technicality. But thanks, as always, for checking in. The Zuda crew has been awesome. =)
... if you win, I mean.
Technically, you still own the whole copyright. It's the trademark that Zuda controls.
Bryy: We understand that. And if Chronicles continues on Zuda we wouldn't have time to do the other 2 Chi series. And that'd be fine by us because with that and the Black Halo stuff going on, we'd have our hands full. I was mainly confused on what you meant by "dangerous".
Fur,
My point is that Zuda will own half the copyright to Chi and it's characters. You would not be able to do two other titles outside of Zuda.
matias2d: Thanks very much for your vote!
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Bryy_Miller: I've gotta be honest, I'm not exactly sure what you mean by "dangerous." Regarding the other 2 Chi series: "Assailment" and "Previsions" are planned as ongoing series running simultaneously with "Chronicles." They're not sequels so "trilogy" isn't the right term. Think more along the lines of say, Web of Spider-Man, Amazing Spider-Man, and Ultimate Spider-Man only in this case each series would focus on different main chars. As far as Zuda, of course we'd really like to continue "Chronicles" on Zuda, but if we don't win, we'll still be doing all the Chi series on our own. Black Halo Entertainment has more in-the-works than just Chi as well. We've also got "Black Halo: The Series" coming in 2009 (and it has 5 different series planned--3 running parallel and 2 to be produced as "sequels" in 2012 or so).
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RKB: Wow - thanks very much for taking so much time and effort to write that! It's not everyday we get such an in-depth review. We sincerely appreciate all your input. Thank you!
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Again, thank you to everyone who's made comments! We enjoy reading them all.
-Daren
www.blackhaloentertainment.com
Dear Zuda Competitors/Creators,
I’m the creator of the Zuda fan blog, and I would love to interview all of this month’s creators. If you would be willing to answer 5-10 questions, to be posted on the Zudafan blog, please contact me at: zudafan@gmail.com.
Feel free to check out the blog: zudafan.blogspot.com
Thanks!
~Liz
cheers people for giving so many uplifting and constructive comments! Sorry I haven't been here visiting until now since so many project have required my attention lately.
Thank you so much and keep voting, so we would all see each other at ComicCon next time! :P
Hello all, a fairly nice comic you have here.
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Text box thought balloons, in the third person????!!!! Narration -I just don't like it, it would have been more engaging if it had been her thoughts and not she, she, she...
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The sequential art was very good, the images used to go along with the words, matched up well. So many text boxes so soon of course concern me, but you did a good job of making what you have to say in them interesting. I enjoy the letters, I even liked the big-freaking-logo in the middle of the page, it kind of balanced everything out for a spider web style screen composition.
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Very good colors, nut in a month where most comics have impressive colors it doesn't stand out as much, more expected than impressive. You happened to get in in a very good month, so it's tough out there.
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I'm guessing as time goes on you plan to add much more twists to the standard fantasy set up and you only have 8 screens here, I think the real test for some one doing a f-f-fantasy comic for Zuda is somehow someway get those twists that set your comic apart from all that came before it into those 8 screens. I don't hate the genre, but it's not my go to read either -in other words- surprise me!
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SCREEN 2 Loved the art on this screen, loved the gold outlines for the girl in these panels, and the colors. In panel 1 I wasn't sure if the two figures in the background was a statue, or a memory (sort of out in the mists?) of her past as a smaller child being instructed? If it was a memory, damn good job on the art, and the script that called for it.
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panel 2 (when I start breaking it down into panels, it's either going to be a lot of praise, or a lot of crits)
'A thunderous crash cracked the wall of her home' Was this a panel description for the artist that got turned into T.B.T.B. -text box thought balloon and you can add a G.D. to the front of that for my part-, by mistake??? We can see what happened what's the need to have us read about it too??? Also, around this time if you cut the T.B.T.B. out and had her speaking it would be much more involving for the reader, less passive maybe yell out a "oh NO!" -or something??? The art's good enough you don't need to knee-cap it, by recapping what's going on.
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panel 3 -"...?", I liked the pnael, I would have liked her yelling because she was afraid more.
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About this GJRF business, if you had her speak more before this, it would have been more engaging, and you wouldn't have needed to clear up the fact she couldn't understand them. Also, -again-, why have us read about her being thrown from her chair when we can see it????
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The figure breaking threw the wall was very dynamic, and damn good use of colors here.
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SCREEN 3 Too much narration.:( The part about wearing too many clothes was interesting and help to set up a 'another world' feel. The 'she rose slowly' deal was again needless hitting the reader's over the head/ the art does a great job of telling that part of the story.
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Aside from all the text boxes cramping the art, this was a very good screen layout. In panel 1 the flame obscured figures behind our heroine, good stuff. The colors made it all better, of course.
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The how did they knock down the wall/ where is my family/ why can't i understand you/ does serve a purpose I know. However 'where's my family/ who are you?/ questions you wanted the reader to wonder about could have been carried across in dialogue, and at this point you in text box overkill land.
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I liked the brutes way of talking, i got it -big mean slow bad guys. Good job on that.
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SCREEN 4 None n-o-n-e none of the text boxes were needed on this screen at all. None of them. Absolutely none of them. Here's why: Go over the screen again and in your mind just blank them out, make'em disappear. Now look at panel 1, it's obvious thanks to the art she's getting to her feet. If the artist is showing, you don't need to be telling. Reminds me of the pages in Scott mcCloud's unerstanding comics where he talks about to show is to tell, to tell is to show... Now panel 3 the close up on her face. Kisalon did a much finer job of getting across the e-m-o-t-i-o-n here with the art, than you did the text Lucain. In fact your word overlay hurt a very well done emotional impact filled panel. I don't know what your panel descriptions read like, but the artist knocked it out of the park, more than enough. 'Hatred filled her heart as she...' She looks fairly well pissed in the panel, no need to tell me what you already showed me. The panel was very well done too by the way.
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What you did do well was the brute talking about training the dog -very good stuff, IMO. It showed a lot of the character, you hit what you were aiming for with that, with me.
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SCREEN 5 Panel 1 amazingly good action shot, the art really nailed it. Again, I like the way the brutes speak. I also like the way you change up the size/ number of panels per screen.
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I enjoyed the layout of panel 2, the composition of both these panels had kind of an 'old school' feel to them to me for whatever reason. Sort of like old pulp paperback's painted covers. Once again another needless text box, your walking all over the art in this story, when you don't need to. You don't get paid by the word ease off the typewriter -er keyboard O.K.:)
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SCREEN 6 Great panel layout. I thought you could have done without the text starting with 'her fear', that aisde when it came to the demon reveal you did text boxes the way they should be done. Not much, and to help as a lead in from panel to panel, good job on using them to tell the reader they are demons. That great look of fear in her eyes you didn't say in the text her 'she is filled with fear because they are demons, the artist handled the emotion part of it, the reason why she was so afraid to see their eyes could only really be handled in the text, which is what you did. Again great art this screen, and very good pace to the story so far which is a kudo's to the writer and artist.
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SCREEN 7 panel 1 very good job showing emotion, and panel 2 really impressive job with the background, Panel 3 also well done. Towards the end here you got a little text heavy, but for the most part it fit. Loved the look of the flames.
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SCREEN 8 The 3rd person narration thing is really getting to me. Very good art on all the panels, the text of her thoughts to identify the exile I know was needed and it came off okay. I enjoyed all the reds showing the destruction, the page layout for this screen, it might have had more impact to end with a close up shot of her 'look of horror' than a long perspective view of her tied to the creature (the effect of the meeting between the two of them was kind of muted. It was a weird way to end it.
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3/5 stars less telling more showing and you would have got 4/5 stars and a fav from me.
Hey Darren,
Just read your comment about the Chi Trilogy over on Zuda Watch.
This is dangerous.
If Chi wins, then you won't be able to do Chi 2 and 3 outside of Zuda, and there's no saying that you'd even be able to do 2 and 3 anyways.
Great work! You have my vote!
Gnar Duce, we very much appreciate you noticing the work that went into the text boxes! When Lewis and Kirsi showed me those for the first time, that was one of my fav things about the comic. And thanks again to everyone for their comments, suggestions, crits, etc. Means a lot to us.
Awesome Art. Great colors. Great eyes. Enjoyed the read/story. (Noticed your work on the text boxes, also impressive,shows a willingness to work on the other details of production).Great comic!
The painting on the art is pretty great. And you did a great job of weaving the text into the comic without making the difference between the two jarring. The synopsis didn't do anything for me really, but the writing in the comic itself did win me over. Good job!
hey its me sandra form DA ^^i told you so i vote ^^!! really amazing comic !! you must win!!
Kisalon, I took a peak at your art on your site and it was epic! The way you bring things to life, it gives you this feeling that any moment the characters'll blink, breath, or move in some way. Very, very nice!
Bagleman – It’s one of our biggest pet peeves as well. This was an embarrassing discovery that wasn’t noticed until after the comic was posted on Zuda. I mistakenly uploaded a previous, unedited version of this screen. My business partner, Daren Strange, and co-writer on other works played editor on this and he was extremely irked when he saw it. He commented on it, albeit light heartedly for my benefit, on the third post, waaaayyy down at the bottom.
Thank you for pointing it out though. And thank you even more for reading!
You've hit my pet peeve, unfortunatly. As much as I love the art, and all the directions that this could go from here, I must say... was the misspelling on page 6 intentional? I don't see any reason it should have been, any hidden meaning in the letter reversal. Anyway. Just thought I'd mention it.
Thank you to whodamanzudaman, flowerfaerie1, and BritannyBarba! I appreciate your comments and time reading the comic!
Love the detail in this comment the graphics are amazing. Hope this book does well...
Awesome artwork!!! I can't wait to read more!